One of the biggest obstacles is trying to provide enough information about the world and society and history so that the players can make informed choices as to what to do next, without revealing too much to the player about what might be going on teat the character wouldn’t know.

For example, Manny is playing Jessie, who is disguised as her dead brother Lauchlan. And for the longest time, while we talked back and forth, James was in the dark as to the disguise. When I posted turns for Jessie, I scrubbed all mention of her true identity from them so when the two would meet, James would honestly have no idea… unless he was observant enough to pick up the clues.

As things progressed, though, it just became a bit too much to keep up for me, since it required so many constant rewrites… and now I am sad that James knows the secret without finding it out along the way through play.

So where possible, I want them to only know what their characters themselves see and experience… and in the case of Bane and the resurrection, it is something that Jessie only has Bane’s word for.

Questioning expectations and challanging assumptions is one of the central themes to the story.

A random question: Do you object to using other points of view? I know that it is a PBeM, and from a specific character’s perspective, so that limits how much you want to show.

For example, the last bit with Bane doing the resurrection / retrieval from DreamTime, doing it from Bane’s perspective, or from an omniscient perspective, might have been really cool. (Possibly without giving the player more information.)

And I’m not at all worried about the typos, though I do admit to laughing at the picture of the great pheasant uprising

I’ll fix the typos and mispellings tonight or tomorrow.

I’ll be honest… I reread what I had down, and it moved me. It really did. Is it sad and sappy to say that what Jessie went through brought tears to my eyes? But it totally did.

A lot of my own past experiences, and what Cassie went through last year and is still going through, fueled quite a bit of it, without going what I hope is too far beyond what is right for such an important part of the story.